What do you think of when someone brings up the topic of miracles? Most people think of stories about Jesus when he cured the sick or when he raised people from the dead. As amazing as that sounds, I feel as though miracles are much more simple than that. I believe miracles are no more than every day occurrences of God’s grace.
To me it seems like some people live there lives day to day waiting for God to show them that one miracle that will change their life. They want to believe in something but they don’t know where to start so they wait for God to give them a sign or guide them to the right path. And I find that to be ridiculous. People shouldn’t wait around for there belief to come and hit them in the face, they need to go out there and find it, and that is exactly what I do. Every day I look for miracles in my life, I look for the little things. Things that remind me that God is present in my life. Not things that show me God is present, because faith is believing in something that you can’t see.
It’s things like getting a good grade on a test or receiving a nice comment from someone you don’t know very well. Or maybe that little miracle could be a good friend, someone that you are close with, someone who you can share things with and be yourself around. It’s little reminders like that where God can be telling you that you aren’t alone, you’ll always have someone down here and you’ll always have someone up there to rely on.
These little miracles give me hope, inspiration, and motivation to get me through my day. I always know I will be able to find one. And the greatest thing is, it never matters how small they are because it will always be able to make me stop for just that one second. That’s all I need, just one second to remind me that God is there to help me, comfort me, and protect me.
Brad, I know what you mean with your thoughts in this essay. People (and myself, often) are thinking they’ll just get this revelation one day, this big miraculous thing to change their life, when small, but equally important, miracles happen everyday. That’s also what I think your essay is trying to say.
I think your essay needs a story, a little more about you. An example of when a miracle happened to you, however small; a story. A little more concrete, a little less cloudy fluff.
I do think what you have now is good, and explains enough about it, but like I said before, needs a story of how this happened to YOU.
I like your third paragraph because it really explains the extent you think miracles go, and what kinds of things you think people should also think of as miracles.
1. the essay seems to be about something that you believe in very strongly. I can see very clearly where you’re coming from. Your belief is clearly stated, and well supported.
2. The essay is obviously personal, but broad enough that I can relate to it. After reading your essay, I can see all the “little miracles” that are in my life that I’ve looked over as being normal and insignificant.
3. you don’t seem to have any specific stories about you personally, but I don’t think that you necessarily need them. The broad examples of “like getting a good grade on a test or receiving a nice comment from someone you don’t know very well” work very nicely with your essay.
6. your essay is very clear and to the point. not much room for misinterpretation.
7. I love the topic. seeing the little things in life for what they are, acts of God. my favorite line is, “Every day I look for miracles in my life, I look for the little things. Things that remind me that God is present in my life. Not things that show me God is present”. overall, I think that the second paragraph best states what you are trying to say. Also, really nice conclusion.
possible corrections:
1. i think that there should be a comma after “me” in the start of the second paragraph. I think it should read, “To me, it seems…”
2. I think that the third paragraph would sound a bit better if you added “the little” to the start so that it read, “It’s the little things like getting…”
Good changes I like this newer direction for the essay. The only other advice at this point would be to include personal examples rather than the broader examples you give in the 3rd examples. As this is a personal belief statement, I think that might make your position even stronger.
1. I definitely feel that you are passionate about what you wrote, especially when you talk about people that wait for miracle, man, you actually sound kind of mad.
2. I think we all see miracles before, if we step back and think. So you did write about a topic that most of us can relate to. Form the bible story to our own story.
3. You give great details about what you believe, from contrasting two kind of believe to giving your own example and insight, you write in a way that is just enough.
4. I did not see much sense description in your essay, maye you can add some when you writing your example.
5. You did a great job of staying focus and stick to the point that you try to make. You start out with a question than example and your own insight, all worked well together to express what you believe. Great job.
6. The greatest strength that you have is the contrasting that you did at the second paragraph, it put us thinking, wondering which group we fit in as a believer. It was quit powerful.
7. Correction: as I say before, maybe some sense description in your example to give it a little color, but overall, it was a great paper and great idea.
Well this really seems to be somewhat like this :
http://godisthere.wordpress.com/2009/08/22/signs-and-wonders-men-dont-believe-without-them/
And yeah about the miracles — I try to balance the logic with faith. Faith outperforms logic sometimes and logic trudges past the narrow-invisible lanes of faith at other times. But in the end…. I arrive at the same result – GOD IS THERE.